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Angel

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~Angel~

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Angel

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From: The Blissful State Of Me?
Registered: 05-21-2001
The information that was previously here is no longer up to date or will be updated.
If a moderator would like to delete this thread please do.

~Angel~

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InsanePoet

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And the longest post award goes to.
*drum role*

Angel

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silicon_chippy

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"This stuff is under Copyrightę So please dont distribute it."

Thankyou for sharing the first chapter with us Angel. Please be assured that I will not distribute it.

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Angel

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InsanePoet: "I accept the award and hope to be undeffeted for the next year or so".

Silicon_Chippy: I dont think anyone here would do such a thing. I only posted that because im very parrinoid

~Angel~

GUMP

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www.christianwriters.com

They have a private, password protected writer's critique group there on the forums; though lately everyone has been busy. I'd be willing to help you though.

AmazingJas

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Just a thought regarding publishing, is there much of a market for online distributed fiction? I know personally, I could never read a whole book sitting in front of my PC, a technical book, I might embrace digitally, in small chunks, but for fiction, I want to be lying down on the lounge or in bed. I'm not trying to discourage you, I think it sounds like a good story, but I would have thought traditional paperback publication would be more appropriate, and even with an average contract, more financially rewarding?
Angel

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Gump what do you mean by "I'd be willing to help you though"?

AmazingJas there seems to be a mass market for online books. The normal publishers dont look at your book. They look at a cuppul of parragraphs from your book and juge just that. Those who are not already massivly famus have the same chance as winning the ladory twice in a row then getting there book published with a big name.

Baby crying sorry about bad spelling
~Angel~

Angel

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Sorry about that last post. Natasha screemed for a little over an hour. So im sure you can imagain how good my conventration was. Back to book stuff.

The truth is people have been reading e-books for years and paying big bucks for it too. That would be what you call an RPG. Actuly I was thinking about useing Swish to do old school style animations. Like on the Super Nintendo when story line was being told. So there will be more then just a book for you to have.

Great Natasha is getting up again. Now im doing short post off the cuff

~Angel~

ArchAngel

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Hey, it looks hecka tight!

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Angel

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ArchAngel I have no clue what you mean? I guess im getting old. Hecka tight... like no one can get into it or its cool? I'm not trying to be mean just trying to understand (maybe my child has impared my understanding of text too). Who knows

~Angel~

ArchAngel

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haha, yeah. it's cool.
was gonna say "hecka 'sic" but didn't.
or maybe I should of went with "fa shizzle"

Crazy Californian Teenager. Yeah. haha. that's me. oh boy.
some people get used to it, others never do, and some don't even want to try.

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GUMP

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I meant that even though I'm busy I'd be willing to critique your work.

BTW, I wouldn't consider a 90,000 word novel long, that's actually closer to a short story. Most of the books I read are between 150,000 to 200,000 words.

Angel

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ArchAngel I understand were your comming from. However im used to being missunderstude because of my unique use of words and or discriptions of my emotions. Thats mainly in person and not in my text.

Well Gump the (ooh there is a spider nest under my moniter and she is killing ants for me how cute!) oh coff coff sorry. I thought she had left but no she is still there. The book was made so short because the publisher I was going for wanted it fast. So I cut off the end part of it and never recounted the words after I added it back. As I remmember though I didnt say the book was big. I said most school kids dred them Thats k though.

Anyways if you mean you want to edit the book I dont need that. Now if you mean you could honistly complain about parts that are hard to read or so I may want the help. Eather way right now im only concerned with editing it for the last time myself. After that I dont know if im going to pay attention to people complain about it and actuly liston to them.

Well its late and I need to get myself ready for bed. Thanks for the comments.
~Angel~

c h i e f y

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Hi Angel, it's great to read of Natasha's happy adventures interspersed into the posts she is a "little" Angel right?

but to go to the case in point Angel, you should ask another person, maybe your wife to check the script for grammar and I'm not being cheeky

You have eliminated 99% of all grammar and spelling problems and now the script looks incredibly clean and well worded BUT even so, a 1% element of error remains

if you say WERE when you meant to say WHERE, no spellcheck can detect that

if you say "The large leafs that fell" instead of "the large leaves that fell" hmmm I don't know if a grammar check would pick that up

There are a few errors like this in your script and although some may say "trivial!" yes of course but finally published books are usually in prestine grammar condition
just a thought, good luck with it and
give Natasha a kiss from me

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chiefyDUNGEON CLOSES on July 1, 2003 it's just getting TOO scary in there!

AmazingJas

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Well if there's a mass market, excellent! I wish you well. I must be a bit behind the times, come to think about it, I probably haven't read any paperbacks in a year or more.
Angel

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Chiefy my wife does go through it. It's just we have both read it so many times Well you know. Anyways I will keep you in mind on the editing thing. Right now im to busy trying to get some art together and set how im going to publish this thing.

AmazingJas your not behind the times. It's really a new market. The only real prob is getting people to read your book in the first place. There is so many people out there trying to sell their books its rediculess. Then so many print on demand things and so on.

~Angel~

Angel

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I wander how many people here write? I mean write something other then a short idea of what they want in an rpg story.

~Angel~

ArchAngel

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I'm about to write, I guess.
I have a million ideas running through my head. maybe I'll write them after I finish some school papers...

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Angel

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Well if your going to start writing and you have so many ideas... the best idea I would say would be to start writing I mean every last thing that comes to mind. I have so many notes laying around its crazy. That is the idea though... whenever im thinking I need something in the story I pull out the ideas. Most stories I read are filled with discriptions. That takes time to lay out and vision. To top it all off it has to be understanduble. Then after all that you get to tell your great idea what am I smiling about its a bloody headake! I mean all my great ideas and I have to wait till the second book to even alow myself to leek some of them out I guess that ok... the reader wouldnt have much of a read if I gave just all the great ideas Ok I better go im having to much fun with the exspression stuff (besides natasha sounds like she is having more fun in her crib then she can handle).

~Angel~

ArchAngel

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yeah.. that's pretty good advice.
I'm kinda working on an outline, so... yeah.

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AmazingJas

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I'm a writer at heart, but don't do it enough. I have on several occasion written about 15-20 pages of a novel before getting sidetracked. I'm thinking about writing articles for magazines as extra income, especially tutorial type articles, which I really enjoy doing.
Angel

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Yah, I know how that all goes. Not out of exspearince. I always have more I could write but I know others who have the same prob. One guy could write some very funny stuff but it had no direct corse. No structure could be found in his writing. Still it was great for a quick laugh

~Angel~

Angel

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You know I was really wandering what you guys thought of the first chapter. Did you like anything about the characters? What did you hate about them? Do any of you want to read the next chapter?

Some feed back would be nice.
~Angel~