Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Robin X: somewhat based on MMX1 ------------------------------------------------ Story: In the year 21XX,On Planet Elysian, Normal Elysians and Elysian Sorcerers lived in peace with one another..or at least tried to. one day,Prof. Abel an Normal Elysian Scientist uncovered a baby sorceress inside a cave.He named the girl,Robin and rased her up as his own. as a child,Robin learned the ways of the Elysian Sorceror from Seraphi,a master sorcerer and friend of Professor Abel. Years have past and Robin grew to be a beautiful young lady,as well as a good sorceress,who was unaware of her unlimited potential. During the moments of peace,a radical organization of Sorcerers was secretly forming. the Group called themselves the SecPro Org and they hated Normal Elysians.SecPro's goal was to oppress and kill all of the Normal Elysians,than Rule the Planet in the name of all Sorcerer kind. Months later,The SecPro Began their attacks,and since the Elysian armada {made up of normals and lower class sorcerers}was no match for them,The Elysian King decided to Create a special Task Force of Sorcerers and Sorceresses called the Warlock Killers. Led by Master Sorceress,Nefertori,The Warlock Killers were succesful in destroying the Evil Organization and its members.However months later,random Sorcerers and Sorceresses started to become Wizards and Witches{evil sorcerers and sorcereses}. The New Wizards and Wiches started a rampage on the Normals and killed some of them. The Evilones were eventualy stopped and killed by the Warlock Killers. However,weeks later Nefertori became a Witch and Converted most of the Warlock Killers to her side..and before Elysian knew it ,SecPro was reborn,with Nefertori as the Leader. Expert Sorceress Ophani, Daughter of Seraphi took over as leader of the Warlock Killers,vowing to destroy the SecPro Org and save the Normals. Robin,having a strong sence of justice,decides to join up with the Warlock Killers. Robin is given her first mission: destroy the SecPro mutant minions who are terrorising the city. ==================================================================== Robin X: A Sorceress who has hidden potential. Robin is unsure of her destiny as well as her history. Robin also has a strong sence of justice and will fight for peace between Normals and Sorcerers. Robin is a member of the Warlock Killers.Her Attack is Mystic Plasma,plasma balls that she can shoot out of her hands.Robin can also charge up her attack and emulate others spells. Ophani: A strong sorceress and longtime friend of Robin.Ophani is the Leader of the Warlock Killers. Armed with the powerful Mystic Sabre. Professer Eric Abel: A normal scientist who found and adopted robin when she was an baby. Nefertori, Queen of the SecPro Org: a pharaoh-like villianess,who commands many mutants,witches,and warlocks.she was once good,but now she's evil. her very goal is to destroy or enslave the Insignificant ones{the elysian normals}and allow the Mysics to rain supreme. Al-Jin: An evil genie-like Wizard that joined the ranks of The SecPro Org,and was eventualy promoted to Nefertori's right-hand man. Travels in a giant hovercraft shaped like a Magic Lamp. Warlock Killers:An Organization of sorcerers and sorceresses that hunt down and punish Witches and Wizards. Jisesu: God,Basically. he created the universe and everything in it. he created Robin to maintain peace on earth. gives Robin her enhencements. SecPro Interns{8 in all}: The Interns are 8 High Ranking Colonels of the Warlock Hunters. But when Nefertori offered them a better deal,they quit the Warlock Hunters and Joined the SecPro as Generals. Each General is an animal-human mutant. The 8 Generals are - Worker Mutants: Worker Mutants created from The Mystic Arts.these things come in all shapes and sizes. SecPro Org: An Evil Mystic Supremesy Organization led by Nefertori. The Goal of this Org. is simple,enslave or kill the Normals and let the world be the perfect place for Mystics. Witchs and Wizards: The term that describes Sorcerers and Sorceresses gone Evil. Sorcerers and Sorceresses: Mystical Beings of the Planet Elysian.also known as the Mystic Elysians. Male and Female Elyisians: The normal humans of the Planet Elysian. Seraphi: a master of the mystic arts,taught Robin how to use her powers.good friends with Prof. Abel. Energy Capsule and Energy Pellet----Refills Robins health. the capsule refills 15% of robins health,while the pellet only refills 5% of her health well what do you think? [This message has been edited by Super Angel Steve (edited July 12, 2006).] |
CoolJ Member Posts: 354 From: ny Registered: 07-11-2004 |
Very Good! I like the overall story concept and characters. I'm not much into the sorceror[ess] thing though. At first I was thinking - hmmm.. there are too many female characters, but then I was thinking if there was a good reason behind WHY this is, then it would be kinda cool. Made me think of Amazons + magic. wait a minute... this just made me think of a cool variation on your theme: what if instead of sorceresses, they were highly skilled in the martial arts: the characters and and overall concept would stay the same. the setting could be: Year: 21XX (or now?) China's policy of strict population control, only allowing one child per househould, along with society's pressure for couples to have male children, led to practice of preinfincidal termination of females. However some couples refused to terminate, but knowing they would not be approved for further children, they were faced with a delimma. A delimma of which only one man had a solution: Dr. Eric Abel. Dr. Abel had set up an underground society for these 'unwants'. Through a system of highly secretive contacts, Dr. Abel would arrange for these children, apon birth, to be sent to a 'safe place' where they would be cared for, but above all, have a future. By using Beijing's long-ago abandoned underground city, once built for a now mostly forgotten cold war, a hidden society of these females sprang up. The underground world was a harsh world, from the vagrants and the lawless of society trying to hide from authorities, to the giant rats, aligators and other monstrocities that have multiplied uninhibited in the For self protection, mental and physical exercise, martial arts became 'everything' for these girls. They woke to it, they practiced it all day, they competed with each other in it, they practiced it just before bed, and they dreamt of it all night. But as these girls became more powerfull in their skills, some became displeased with their underground society and began to desire to rule over the other underground inhabitants and to destroy the 'top world' inhabitants.
instead of the 'bad' generals being animal-human mutants. Each girl has mastered a variation of martial arts, symbolized by the animals mentioned. ..and Robin (the hero) wasn't brought into the system by the typical way, she was found *gasp* underground by Dr. Abel, how she got there, no one knows..... Anyway, just an idea! |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Thank you,but I like by story better. The whole sorcery thing was my intention. as is the "Non-Earth" planet.but what you see is just a small chunk of the rest of the story..it gets better. thanks anyway. ------------------ [This message has been edited by Super Angel Steve (edited July 12, 2006).] |
HanClinto Administrator Posts: 1828 From: Indiana Registered: 10-11-2004 |
Howdy, Steve! I like how in your game there is a definite good and a definite evil. The sorcery thing will make a lot of Christians uncomfortable because of its close ties with real-world witchcraft, but that is likely a debate for another hour. I'm curious as to how much of a parable/analogy/metaphor you're trying to make with this game. quote: So I'm just not sure if Robin parallels to an angel in our world, or a human, or if you're not intending for there to be any parallels drawn at all -- I.E. "it's just a pure fantasy story -- don't try to draw lines where they shouldn't be drawn". This is the old Narnia vs. Middle Earth debate -- how much Christian allegory one puts in their work. I think that fantasy is fine -- I'm just trying to get a handle on what your intentions are.
quote: haha. Nice. Reminds me of the good 'ol Carmen Sandiego games. (side note I just noticed -- pythons aren't venemous) Thanks for posting your game idea! Cheers! --clint |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Jisesu: God,Basically. he created the universe and everything in it. he created Robin to maintain peace on earth. gives Robin her enhencements. Rip off the 'U' and sound it out...It should sound like "Gee-sus" Anyway,i was influenced by both the Anime Series 'Witch Hunter Robin' and my Favorite Game Series 'Mega Man X'. This game is Pure Fantasy. [This message has been edited by Super Angel Steve (edited July 12, 2006).] [This message has been edited by Super Angel Steve (edited July 12, 2006).] |
CoolJ Member Posts: 354 From: ny Registered: 07-11-2004 |
quote: LOL! yeah...I get carried away sometimes. I look forward reading some more of it if you post it! |
HanClinto Administrator Posts: 1828 From: Indiana Registered: 10-11-2004 |
quote: I caught the "Jesus" reference to the chief Deity in your story's world -- and so that's sortof why I started wondering if you were trying to put elements of spiritual analogy into the game or not, and if you were asking for critique of your analogies. I didn't want to go off on that rabbit trail unless you were asking for it though, so thanks for clearing that up. Other than that, it sounds like it could be a general fun game. --clint |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Heres the Rest: After clearing the streets,Robin is confronted by Al-Jin. They,fight and Al-Jin scores a perfect victory.Al-jin mock robin's efforts and prepares to finish her. Ophani arrives to save Robin from death. Al-Jin escapes in the 'Jihad',his lamp-like hovercraft. The 2 Sorcereses talk about the threat being stronger than they thought.Ophani asighns Robin with a new task,Kill the SecPro Interns who are occupying 8 parts of the world.Ophani decides to Search the World for more Renegade Forces like the SecPro and Destroy them. The 2 Leave for WKHQ to prepare for their missions. Later at the base,Robin is ready for her Mission and Given a Stage selection: After Beating 4 bosses,Robin returns to WKHQ to rest up.while lying down in her quarters,Robin Wonders what her true destiny is? and what did Jisesu have planed for her? Meanwhile,in Max City on Max Island,Ophani is battling evil mutants.after saving the city,she gets attacked by a Dragon. after she beats the dragon she wonders how robins doing? after that she continues her mission. Back at HQ,Robin leaves her quarters to continue her mission. After destroying the remaining 4 bosses,Robin returns to HQ. Ophani teleports in and tells Robin that while on her mission she has found the location of SecPro HQ. the 2 than leave for SecPro HQ, A Fortress on ChristTradi Island.
Robin is standing on a cliff,watching WK jets destroy the fortress with their missiles. while watching,robin reflects on her past missions and the friend she has lost. she than continues to wonder what her true purpous in life is?,what Jisesu has planed for her. Until she gets the answers she's looking for,Robin decides to keep fighting global corruption. [This message has been edited by Super Angel Steve (edited July 13, 2006).] [This message has been edited by Super Angel Steve (edited July 13, 2006).] |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Jisesu's Capsules: The Boots---allow Robin to hover for a couple of seconds,they also make her move quicker. The Armor allows Robin to take more enemy damage. The Tiara allows Robin to use her 'learned spells' infinitly..as long as she doesn't charge them up. The Cape allows Robin to preform the rushing attack,called Mystic Strike...an attack that can be used infinitly and in midair. The Armbands allow Robin to Charge up her 'learned spells',it also increses the power of her Myistic Plasma =============================================================================================================== Each boss Has A Weakness to A Spell. Anna Kondah---------Freezing Wrath or Mystic Plasma Energy Capsule and Energy Pellet-------Found in every stage. The Emulated spells Are: ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Well What do you Think? I'll be waiting For Your Answers.....But Not For Too Long. ------------------ |
samsonscage Junior Member Posts: 2 From: Redmond, OR, 97756 Registered: 07-15-2006 |
Hey Steve, I think your on to something there, but I kindof agree with the other person, it may or it may not bother some Christians when it comes to sorcery, but then again, whatever you call people that do such things, like witchcraft, satanist, and so forth, they still have one thing in common, they have ties to demonic influence. And we as Christians have also one thing in common, we have ties to the one that can destroy their influence. Which gave me an idea too for a game to share with anyone that would be interested, and if anyone IS interested, please feel free to either edit it and/or use it for your future Christian game. I'm not giving it a name, but it's based on the plot taken from resident evil 4. In resident evil 4 there are no zombies, but the people seem to be influenced by some kind of demonic oppresion. In this Christian version the Presidents daughter is kidnapped by a cult group that has strong ties to Satanism. After having a meeting to discuss who he should send in to save her, the president desides to send in a young John Doe who is very skilled in the martial arts, but many are not convinced that John Doe, who is a Christian should be sent in, but the president is very confident in his choice. After ariving in a wooded area, much like that of resident evil 4, the story could then take a similar plot from then on, but instead of monsters and people becoming monsters, the people are demon possessed with super human strength and demonic speech, and he constantly prays now and then throughout the story for guidence, as well as for hidden knowledge as to the exact location of the presidents missing daughter. Just an idea |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Cool,well good luck on it. I need someone to make my game{since i don't know how},any one interested. ------------------ |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
On Samson's subject: Has anyone read the Cooper Kid's Series by Frank Peretti? It sounds lame but it's a great adventure series, about an archaeologist father and his two kids. The stories themselves are really awesome, so I won't ruin them by trying to summerize them. However they're alot like your idea Samson, especially in the first one, because the family is able to explore places others cannot because of their strength in God. That's putting it rather lamely, but it's really neat in execution, I always thought it would make a cool game, might be worth a read. Frank Peretti kind of did for Christian novels what I'd like to do for Christian gaming, his book are really neat reads. ------------------ Of course God knew what would happen if they used their freedom the wrong way: apparently He thought it worth the risk. Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another: What! You too? I thought I was the only one. |
LegaianLight Member Posts: 71 From: Colorado, United States Registered: 04-04-2006 |
Honestly, i tend to agree with what people have said on how the satanistic/witchcraft/etc have a tendency to shine through more than any other christian value that you might try to show. There are plenty of alternatives, imho, that would work well. As far as making the game, what are you looking for? i honestly didnt take time to read through all of your posts so if you mentioned it elsewhere, sorry. However, what kind og graphics would this have? 3d, 2d, text? For profit or just freeware? platform? things like that could help narrow down who could help. Just thought id give my input ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
quote: I appologize if i have offended anyone,I didn't mean to do it If I did.As fore the Game Itself,It would be a 2d action platformer{like megaman}with 3d graphics{think super smash bros}for the PC. I'd do it for profit.....Cheap,only $30. as I mentioned earlier I can't make these games,or any game,because I don't know how. Any More Questions or Comments? because I'm Open. ------------------ |
LegaianLight Member Posts: 71 From: Colorado, United States Registered: 04-04-2006 |
Personally, i wouldnt say it offends me so much as i dont think i would play a game that had something of that nature in it, if you see what im saying. To me its more WWJD to put it the easeist way i can. I see it as more detrimental to the cause of the game if it includes these things as opposed to if it didnt. And sure, your never going to make everyone happy for the most part, however there really is only one person you should want to like the game, and thats Jesus. Just to strengthen my point a little, look at the topic of harry potter. even if it depicts good themes, a lot of Christians are put off with the fact that it does, in some respects, promote sorcery. In any case, i do think your game idea looks cool and has promise, minus those things. On the game topic, i want to clarify weather or not you mean the same quality of graphics as super smash or just the same style of 3d in a more 2d environment. If you want the same quality, that will take some work and you may have a hard time accomplishing that. Its not like you cant find someone to do it, its just harder. At the moment, i cant offer my help in any way, as im just starting to learn how to use different languages. I'll let you know if i feel i can help at a later point in time. God Bless you! ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
quote: thanks. and to answer your question. its a 2d game that uses 3d sprites and backrounds. anything else,anyone? ------------------ |
Lava Member Posts: 1905 From: Registered: 01-26-2005 |
Will the people who make your game get paid up front? Percentage of the game's sales? Or volunteer? ------------------ |
Lazarus Member Posts: 1668 From: USA Registered: 06-06-2006 |
quote: I've read that series, he's a good author. Putting them in a game tho'... Lazarus |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
Well I meant the same concept of story type. The stories themselves don't lend particularly well to a full length game, but then again neither does Lord of the Rings, they had to add things and extend certain things to make it work, which would be what would be required in such an instance. ------------------ Of course God knew what would happen if they used their freedom the wrong way: apparently He thought it worth the risk. Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another: What! You too? I thought I was the only one. |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
quote: Neither,I'm gonna sell my Idea to a Game company who wants it,If they don't intend to butcher it. ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Well regardless of what you say,I still think this is a great game idea. The Story's so good that I might have this made into a Comic book or a Manga. This may make a good animated series as well. ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
Sample of the script: Robin teleports to her destination and sees a bunch of cars racing away from the city. Robin: they must be fleeing the city due to the SecPro Attack. Better get goin'. Robin presses on and gets attacked by a giant mutant hornet. Robin recovers from the attack and attacks the hornet. Robin kills the hornet. Robin: that was a nice little warm up.now to find out who is behind this. Robin presses on and gets attacked by a bunch of worker mutants. robin destroys them all. she than gets attacked by a giant scorpion mutant. Robin fights it and kills it. Robin: I think that was the last of them.{looks up and sees a m-lamp shaped hover tank about to land} What is that? The Hover-Tank lands and a fat Genie-Like man comes out. Robin abit surprised: Al-Jin? Why are you here? Al-Jin with an evil smile: Why,I'm here to kill you by Orders of Queen Nefertori. Robin shocked: What? you mean you sold your soul to the SecPro?How could you? Al-Jin laughing: that's right,girl. I have gotten sick of the Warlock Killers and joined the SecPro,as mistress nefertori's right hand man.infact the Nefertori has also made the same deal to the 8 Worlock Hunter Colonels,who are now SecPro Generals. Robin: So,It's true after all. The 8 Womanimals Have become SecPro servants.Whatever,I'll stop them. Al-Jin laughs evily:Sure thing,but Only if you beat me. which I can assure you,isn't going to happen. Robin: We'll see. Al-Jin attacks Robin and the fight Begins. However Robins Mystic Buster is inaffective against the Fat Genie. Al jin manages to flawlessly beat Robin. Al-jin laughing: See girly,you are no match for me. Now to send you to hell. As Al-Jin is about to finish robin off, Ophani arrives. Al-Jin smiling: Ah,Ophani. So have you come to except my offer and join the SecPro? Ophani: In your dreams,lardo.{puls out her Mystic Sabre and prepares to use it}You have 10 seconds to leave here or else. Al-Jin chuckling: Or Else What? your gonna slice me up.HA,your Sabre is not strong enough to cut me. If you like,I shall proove it to you. Ophani: you know,I've always suspected that you were a traitor from day one,but i was unsure of my suspisions.Now I know that my suspisions were on the mark.You never really liked the Normals,did you? then why did you join the Warlock Killers in the First Place? Al-Jin chuckling: I was sent by the old Leader of the SecPro as a Spy and Recruiter. Ophan angry: You ******* . Al-Jin: Enough of this chit-chat,let's see if my theory is correct. Female Voice: Al-Jin,that's enough. Al-Jin looking around confused: Misstress Nefertori? is that you? where are you? Nefertori's Voice: I'm contacting you telepathically,nimrod. now look,I know how much you want to beat ophani up,but do it on your own time,I have work for you. Return to base imediatly for further details. Al-jin: Yes,my misstress.On my way. {to ophani} we will finish our battle another time Misstress Nefertori beckons me. Al-Jin jumps back into his MagicLamp-like hovercraft and flies away in it. Ophani looking at al-jin fly away: We will meet again,Al-Jin. {turns to the beaten robin} Robin,Are you ok? How badly did that ******* hurt you? Robin slowly getting up: I'm fine,It's just my ego thats damaged. I really thought that I could've won. Ophani: Sorry to burst your bubble,but Al-Jin is a Master of the Mystic Arts,you need more strength and experience to stand a chance against a mystical fighter like him.{puts hand on robins shoulder,smiling with hope} look,you have yet to reach your full potenial, and when that day comes you will be ready to take down Al-Jin as his equal,you might be even stronger than Nefertori.{removes hand,gets serious} Ok,enough of this female bonding,we have work to do.I'm gonna scout the world looking for more Renagade forces like the SecPro,while you deal with the 8 Turncoat Generals. I know you can do it. See Ya. Ophani teleprts away. Robin sighs: well I'd better get back to HQ and prepare for my mission. {teleports away} Robin teleports into WHHQ's Command Center,a room with many computers including a master computer. Robin sees Seraphi near the super computer and walks to him: Hey,Master Seraphi.. Seraphi: Hello Robin,are you ready for your next mission? Robin: yeah,But Um,just to refresh my memory,can you give me some breif info about the villians that i'm gonna take down? Seraphi to the master computer: Magiranger,give us some info about the Traitorous Generals. Magiranger the Master Computer: Right Away,sir.{Jackle-Lynn's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Jackle-Lynn is a jackle girl with the power of darkness. she Murdered Thousand of People and is Hiding on Shadow Island..{Morggana Succubat's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Morggana Succubat is a bat-woman succubus that can generate sonic waves.she Suduced and Killed Millions of normal men.she's Hidden in the Caves of Wonder on Gem Island. { Lita Gata's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Lita Gata is a cat girl with the power of thunder. she has Taken Over Elysian's Main Power Source,The Power Spire on Central Island.{Hotaru Nicus' mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Hotaru Nicus is a firefly girl with the power of light.she has Taken Over Elysian World Labs on Ameri Island,Elysian's #1 source for mutant creation. {Anna Kondah's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Anna Kondah is a python girl with poisonus blasts.she Runs a Narcotics Factory on Lifeforce Island. .{Liza Dragonfire's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Liza Dragonfire is a dragon girl with the power of flame. She Plans to reactivate the powerful Mount Volcaman on Afasika Island..{Lady Octavia's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Lady Octavia is an octopus girl with the power of water.She Hijacked Ocean Island's Grand Seabase. {Callisto Ursartic's mugshot appears on its huge flatscreen moniter} Callisto Ursartic is a polarbear girl with the power of ice. she has Taken Over Frigiman Island. And there you have it,the 8 Evil Generals in a nutshell. Robin: Cool. I'll take on Liza Dragonfire first,since Afasika Island is in the most danger. Seraphi: Sorry,Robin. but Liza Dragonfire is Way out of your leauge. besides,I have already sent the Dark Destroyers Task Force to handle Afasika's problem.They'll get the job done,I know they will. Robin: Lets hope so. I guess I'll challange Anna Kondah then. Seraphi: Wise choice.Since Kondah is has a weaker defence than the other 7. Robin teleports to her destination. Robin Teleports to the Narcotics Factory and is assaulted by worker mutants. Robin beats the workermutants and continues through the factory. While continuing,Robin Finds a Strange Humnsized Capsule. ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
well what do ya think? ------------------ |
Super Angel Steve Member Posts: 212 From: Staten Island,Ny Registered: 05-10-2006 |
I've decided not to have this made into a game,but a Graphic Novel..aka Manga. ------------------ |