Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
Here is a poem I wrote today, just thought I'd run it by your guys. I took it up as a hobby to spice up my storytelling (and hense my game design as well). I've written a few bits of story here and there, as well as a few more poems, I'll post them if you like, but please check this one out first though and tell me what you think. Fantasy Wrapped in imagination's thrall An endless sphere of realms unseen Heart beats roll Gone are shades of a thousand greys Into the glittering crystal sphere of realms unseen ------------------ |
Lava Member Posts: 1905 From: Registered: 01-26-2005 |
I like it! Keep up the good work, will be glad to see more! ------------------ |
buddboy Member Posts: 2220 From: New Albany, Indiana, U.S. Registered: 10-08-2004 |
wow... great! keep up the great work!! hey, are you a teenager? if you are, i have a blog for teenagers to put poems. i would love to have yours on there. if you are interested, i can post it for you. you could be like a writer for a newspaper, if you have one, give it to me and i will put it on. but this is all up to you. btw, GREAT POEM!! ------------------ |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
Yes I am, I've got a few more, alot of which are a good bit better than that one. I'll gladly post them here and then you can copy them over to your blog if you like. Just please put them under my pseudonym (The Bard). Here are a few more I wrote. Chivalry is Dead Knight in armor, silver gilded Respect for others Have these things all passed away Where are the knights of olden lore Still from the ashes there may arise
Shadowed faces, garbled voice Cowled face leering A shattered sphere A thousand crystal coffins A moment captured, now is wasted A ray of hope I sorely seek
The lark’s fair song has ceased to be If sky could sing so fair a song
A cat and a bursar were walking one day Oh Mother A long road they walked So onward they walked and the cat he did purr Oh bother Long on the green forest road they did walk “Dear cat,” said the man L’arn him Foolish old man on the forest road green “I see now dear bursar that your words, they ring true” Darn it A long, long time the cat he had searched “Well well friend cat, why dids’t thou not say that ye were but a dis-enthroned Duke?” Licked him The foolish old bursar, so crafty and old knew not that the small cat had tricked him. “You lie through your teeth oh dear brother of mine” Le fin With a wave of the cat’s paw the poor bursar did squeak, and a mouse he did soon become
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Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
I've got a few more, but they're mostly ones I was made to make on a certain subject, they're not as good. ------------------ |
buddboy Member Posts: 2220 From: New Albany, Indiana, U.S. Registered: 10-08-2004 |
whoa!! great!! cool!!i am not gonna use them all at once, so i may need to bookmark this page and come back to it... but then again it only bookmarks the main page doesn't it? ah well... ------------------ |
bennythebear Member Posts: 1225 From: kentucky,usa Registered: 12-13-2003 |
you've got talent . ------------------ proverbs 25:7 www.gfa.org - Gospel for Asia www.persecution.com - Voice of the Martyrs |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
I really prefer stories to poems, and I write those alot better. I've got a story I might post later, but it needs alot of revision before I release it to the public eye. ------------------ |
buddboy Member Posts: 2220 From: New Albany, Indiana, U.S. Registered: 10-08-2004 |
i remember this one story i wrote when i was in like 4th grade, and it was about this game that i still have and really like... it was an RTS and i was trying to submit it to the game's website because they had some fan-fiction thing and it was supposed to be battle stories... but it never worked out... i don't even know if i still have that story!! ------------------ |
Eternal_Happy_Dragon Junior Member Posts: 6 From: Pensacola, Florida, USA Registered: 01-17-2006 |
Man, taht is some good stuff!! Do you mind if I write a song with my band for it? It sounds really good!! ------------------ |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
All yours. ------------------ |
buddboy Member Posts: 2220 From: New Albany, Indiana, U.S. Registered: 10-08-2004 |
well, i hadn't been able to work on my blog for a while, but i just put your first poem on Ereon!! Check it out at http://teenagepoems.blogspot.com !! ------------------ |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
I noticed that some of the others are kinda of messed up in formattting. I'll fix them real quick and repost them. That's a nice site, good work on it, I hope you get some comments posted soon. ------------------ |
buddboy Member Posts: 2220 From: New Albany, Indiana, U.S. Registered: 10-08-2004 |
huh? how are they messed up? lemme check... i don't see anything wrong... ------------------ [This message has been edited by buddboy (edited January 18, 2006).] |
Ereon Member Posts: 1018 From: Ohio, United States Registered: 04-12-2005 |
Ok, must just be a format issue on my end. ------------------ |