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New Poem – InsanePoet

InsanePoet

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Posts: 638
From: Vermont, USA
Registered: 03-12-2003
 		Here is my latest work

--THY VOICE RESONATING--
--THY WILL RESIDING--
By Brenton R. Keegan

Oh Thy omnipotent will
Nothing can resist
All things must fulfill
What Thy will insists

Hear thy voice resounding
And the void must comply
and its retort rebounding
and heed to its imply

Recieve thy song residing
My heart must concur
to Thy will abiding
Alas, I am Yours


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Victory Infinitum

[This message has been edited by InsanePoet (edited April 03, 2002).]
D-SIPL

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From: Maesteg, Wales
Registered: 07-21-2001
 		hehe, i can never understand poems. I think it's really good, and looks and sounds professional, by that i mean, i don't understand most of it so it must be professional!!

I should have tried harder at English when i was at school

Nice work though, do you do it as a profession?

--D-SIPL
graceworks
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Posts: 455
From: Corvallis, Oregon, USA
Registered: 03-03-2001
 		Disclaimer, I know less than D-Sipl about poetry, but offer this suggestion. It may be off-base if I misunderstood the line, so filter my response as necessary. -Tim

quote:
Originally posted by InsanePoet:
Here is my latest work

Thy voice resounding
The voice must comply

If the second sentence is referring to "us", then I would suggest:
"the heart must comply" or
"the synapses must comply" or
??

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InsanePoet

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Posts: 638
From: Vermont, USA
Registered: 03-12-2003
 		There were some typos, i corrected them

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Victory Infinitum
c h i e f y

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Posts: 415
From: Surrey, United Kingdom
Registered: 03-07-2002
 
 crazy skies are wild above me now
winter howling at my face
everything I held so dear - disappeared without a trace
I've been talking drunken gibberish, falling in and OUT of bars......
tryin' to get some explanation here, fathom the way some people ARE
how did it ever come so FAR?